Smoke

The grey eyes were like a puff of cloud ready for heavy downpour but concern held it back. Her bony fingers would interlock in disquietude then she would fidget back & forth in anticipation, waiting for her mother to recover.

Little did the ten year old know that death is irrevocable.

‘Time will heal everything’ exclaimed a vast concourse of mourners but in their hearts they know that some wounds stay fresh forever. Her memory lingers like a pall of dust & smoke encircling our present, aphyxiating us for the trillionth time as we yearn for mother’s love.


I’ve written this for a challenge posted on Finally Unchained. Do check it out if you’re interested!

17 Comments

  1. AQUIB says:

    , this is a poignant read, must say that you have penned it metaculosly.
    (I am really thankful to the Almighty/the Creator for my beloved parents .)

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    1. Nameera says:

      Thank you so, very much!

      So am I, Alhamdulillah.

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  2. Amartya says:

    The bond between a child and his/her parents is so sacred and emotionally attached that, sometimes it becomes very hard for one to accept they are no more there.

    So nicely written.🤗

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    1. Nameera says:

      I know. It’s hard to accept their absence. Some people never truly move on.

      Thank you! 😊

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      1. Amartya says:

        Yes so true.
        You are welcome.🤗

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  3. Sakshi says:

    A vacuum that can never be filled…..poignant

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    1. Nameera says:

      Indeed. A wound that stays afresh. Thanks for reading!

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      1. Sakshi says:

        It was a pleasure

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  4. Beautiful portrayed. Some wounds never heal

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    1. Nameera says:

      Thanks a lot!

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  5. Pia Majumdar says:

    Keep writing like this girl, you need more recognition 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Nameera says:

      Thank you so, very much! 😊
      I’m really overwhelmed by your lovely comment. 🌸

      Liked by 1 person

      1. Pia Majumdar says:

        ❤️❤️

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  6. So Sad! 😦 lovely writing.

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    1. Nameera says:

      Indeed.
      Thanks for reading!

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